Tuesday, 20 March 2012

Rosa's final fanfiction
















Tinkerbell run away from home

Once upon a time, there was a little girl named Tinkerbell lived with her mother in the small  house in the middle of the forest. One day her mother told Tinkerbell to clean the house and washed all the dirty dishes, however, she couldn't do it because of her extra small size. When her mother return home, she yelled at Tinkerbell, she got  really angry at her.

"Tinkerbell how many times do I have to tell you to wash the dishes? You make me angry all the time because you're the most useless person I've ever known ". Tinkerbell  scared of her mother and she couldn't say one word to answer her back.

But she's only wispered to herself.


" What should I do?" Tinkerbell asked herself. "My mother hates me, she didn't care for me." 


Tinkerbell sang her favourite song to comfort her sadness.


" I had a dream this song to sing"
"To help me cope with anything"
"If you see the wonder of a fairytale"
"If you can see the future, even if you fail"


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HSWR4os7I7E




Tears dropped like heavy rain when Tinkerbell stopped singing. Her sadness sprung from the bad memories of how her mother treated her. She sat on the doorstep thinking of what else she could do to make her mother happy.  Then Tinkerbell decided that she would write a letter for her mother to tell her how much she loved her. 

These are the words in the letter she wrote!!



Dear mother,


Why are you so angry at me? 
I'm not strong enough to do stuff around the house because of my size
I'm your daughter; who loves you very much
But although you don't love me anymore, my love for you will never end
So now, mother its better for me to go away instead of staying here in the house.


I love you so much mother


Love  

Tinkerbell, your smallest daughter





About few hours later since poor little Tinkerbell left the house, the cruel mother arrived home. She opened the door and started screaming her daughter's name.



 "Tinkerbell where are you!" her angry mother started, as she stomped around the house looking for little Tinkerbell. She yelled her name again, but still there was no answer.

The mother grew more and more angry towards her daughter. She told Tinkerbell to clean the dishes, however, she failed to get the job done; claiming she was too short to reach the tap in the sink, because of her ultra-small size. But because of her mother's laziness, she kept piling the dirty dishes up on her daughter.


Bell and Edward in the forest

"Hello! hey Edward are you available at 2pm this afternoon?" Belle asked Edward on the phone. 

"Yes! Why?"

"Well I want to talk to you about something"

 "Something like what? Are you having an affair or something?"

 "Edward what the hell!"

"Relax I'm just kidding", he calmed her down

 "Yeah that's better. Be nice, otherwise I will keep my secret to myself", Bell smiles. 

"Okay Bella lets meet at 2 then."


"Sure 2 sounds fine. We can meet at our secret place."

"Okay sweetheart see you then at our usual spot". Ed responded with a cheeky smile.

 Belle hung up on the call, grabbed her school bag and made her way to her car. 

Turning on the radio to her favorite station, Micheal Jackson's song was on. She sang along aloud, smiling at the thought of how positive Ed will be and accept her big news; that she is going to travel abroad and attend another university without him. From the same time she thought to herself about how transferring to Oxford would mean living really far from Edward. Would she really cope on her own, not having him there? These thoughts circled in her mind but she knew that it had to be done. All she needed to do now was to tell him that she would take up the scholarship. It's a once in a lifetime opportunity and Edward would still be there. Or would he?

Upon entering the forest, she smelled the sweet scent of Ed's usual cologne. Bell smiled because it reminds her of their strong bond.

Belle arrived and the forest was it's usual dark shades and as always, Edward was already there. She hopped out from the car, running to give Edward a huge hug. Bell's excitement for sharing the news showed through her enthusiastic expression, however, this was cut short by an unexpected loud noise which came from a nearby bush.








Tinkerbell hide in the bush

Startled by the sound, Belle stopped completely as she focused on the bush.

"Edward shhhhhhhhhh, I can hear something moving from over there".

She walked slowly towards the moving bush, but got the biggest fright from the sound that followed.

"Ouch! you kicking me", the angry voice said.

"Who said that?" a paranoid Belle asked repeatedly.


"Down here, seriously are you blind! You can't honestly tell me that you don't see me." Tinkerbell yelled at the top of her lungs.

"Oh crap, sorry."



"Stupid idiot, you'd better be or else." Tinker whispered to herself.

"Huh?"

"Nothing."

"Wow you are like so small. What's your name? More importantly, what are you doing in a place like this?"

"I could ask you the same thing." She whispered again to herself.

Belle just couldn't believe it when she saw a small tiny little girl wearing a green dress matched to the color of the bush. "What are you doing inside here little girl?" asked Belle.

"First of all I am not little girl. My name is Tinkerbell. I ran away from home, because my mother didn't love me. I want to go school but she won't let me". moaned the little girl.

The little girl stood up and tried to find something in the bush to stand on before she continued talking; also because of her small size made it hard for Belle to see where she was talking from. Now Belle could see more than just little hands moving around in the leaves.

"Luckily I didn't stand on you little girl. Are you okay?" Belle repeatedly apologised."

"No! I'm not okay. I'm freezing cold in here because I'm wet from falling into the puddle under the this strange bush", the little girl responded.

"Oh. Whoops that's my fault."

Belle who are you talking to?" Edward yelled from the other side.

"Come here Edward I want you to meet someone". replied Belle.

Edward shook his head, choosing not to move from the same spot. Bell called again urging him to meet the little girl. But instead, he scratched his head hinting at not going over at all.

Walk all the way there for a random stupid little girl? He thought to himself. All he did was moan, which Belle could understand. After all, he is never really keen on meeting strangers.


"Hey Edward, seriously you're a vampire, she is just a little girl." She shot an unimpressed look towards him.

"Umm."

"Come closer, she don't bite". Belle smiled in an attempt to persuade him.

But Edward just stared. He wasn't too happy about his secret being exposed to a stranger.

"Does she have good blood?" Edward joked.

"Stop it you're scaring her" Belle shot back.

"Don't be scared Tinkerbell, come out and meet my boyfriend Edward." Belle reassured.

Tinkerbell felt uneasy when she heard Bell's boyfriend mentioned blood. Instead she dived back into the bush in an attempt to hide from Edward. But because of a lengthy conversation whispered between her and Belle, she finally came out with a cheeky grin.

What Edward was unaware of, however, was that Belle had bigger plans for him and Tinkerbell for when she left for her student exchange to Oxford. This was the perfect opportunity for Tinkerbell to be away from her prison-like home while having fun with what Belle had in store for her.












 To be continue...................



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3 comments:

  1. Hi Rosa, this is looking really awesome so far. I love that you took your story ideas and made them a single story, and the sections flow together well. The dialogue between characters is really well written too. Just a few little mistakes in grammar at the very beginning that I noticed, such as "the mother told Tinkerbell" might sound nicer if it was "her mother" instead. Also, "The mother return home" might sound nicer if it were "When her mother returned home". But that's about all I could see, and those are just suggestions I thought might help. It sounds really great so far, and I look forward to seeing more! :D

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  2. Hello Christie, thanks for your comment, this is something that can help me to improve my story. I will take on board the mistakes in grammar that you mentioned and correct them. You know sometimes the writer do not know the mistake in the story, unless they get some feedback from readers. I will go thought it again and check them. Don't worry there more to come..:))

    cheers

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  3. My plan for my brief 2 will based on Child abuse, Sex trafficking. I believe these two topic can work together. I really don't like the way people abusing small innocent babies because of drugs, abusing, alcohols and also violence in the family. On the other hand, people who forcing young children to do sex work on the street for money for their own good but they do not realised the dangerous they and the affecting they put it through to pure life of these young people. Hopefully everybody will understand why i chose these two topics to combine together for my brief 2.


    good luck all

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